STORM
The day started with a memory. Something I didn't want to recall, but came to me in a rush of past moments. My sisters. Darkness. Fire. Blood. Weakness. And at last, the rain. The cleansing of sin. My eldest sister, Islee, always said that when it rained in our sector, its sin was washed away until the next came. That to stand in the rain was to be cleansed of wrong-doing and impurities.
The people of this place are full of impurities, and yet they shy away from the rain. They stay indoors, they hide in their homes. They put umbrellas over their heads and use rain coats cover their bodies. As I looked out of my apartment, I was gripping the window frame, watching them avoid the one thing that could help cleanse them, watching as they felt none of their shame. It made me feel sick.
I closed my eyes and pressed my forehead to the cool window, trying to feel at home, listening to the pattering of the rain.
I felt it, a storm coming. I knew instantly that this one wouldn't just be thunder, rain, and lightning.
The people of this place are full of impurities, and yet they shy away from the rain. They stay indoors, they hide in their homes. They put umbrellas over their heads and use rain coats cover their bodies. As I looked out of my apartment, I was gripping the window frame, watching them avoid the one thing that could help cleanse them, watching as they felt none of their shame. It made me feel sick.
I closed my eyes and pressed my forehead to the cool window, trying to feel at home, listening to the pattering of the rain.
I felt it, a storm coming. I knew instantly that this one wouldn't just be thunder, rain, and lightning.
Sonora Ecko:
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Darkness. Fire. Blood. Weakness. And at last, the rain. (makes emphasis on each word)
The people of this place are full of impurities, and yet they shy away from the rain. (very descriptive and metaphorical)
2.) What kind of person do you think this character is?
She seems a little depressed and it doesn’t seem like she feels welcomed or like she fits in where she is. She seems that she misses “home” which is not specified.
She seems jittery and anxious.
Brown medium length hair.
3.) What do you want to know more about?
Where is she from? Where is her “home”?
Why does she feel so out of place/unwelcomed?
4.) What seems confusing?
Who is her sister and what role does she play in the story? (she was briefly mentioned but didn’t really explain anything else about her)
Does she like the town or not?
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